What I learned In Advanced Writing (sciences)
In my overview of what I learned throughout the course I listed many different genre appeals, canons and I learned throughout this course. I will now tell you how I apply that terminology to the rhetorical studies in my minor assignments as well as my major assignments. Also, I will go through the drafting I went through on my preliminary analysis and final project for you to see what edits I made based on feedback from my peers, professors, and the writing center.
What I learned through the Minor Assignments
In minor assignment 1 I was able to apply what I learned from Montgomery how the term rhetoric apply to science writing in the form of storytelling. Also, I was able to learned how rhetoric in science helps with your writing language and how it organizes your writing in order to communicate to your discourse community effectively.
In minor assignment 2 I was able to learn how my Finance teacher syllabus used certain language and tone within it. I then learned how the way my Finance teacher wrote his syllabus was a direct effect of his discourse community being in business. People within business tend to write in a very straightforward way that is concise and clear.
In minor assignment 3 I was able to learn to apply what I learned about Finance by looking at a Finance article. I was able to apply appeals within looking at this Finance article. One appeal I looked at was pathos because when I learned when looking at investments in Finance a person's emotion has a big impact on the strategy they use when looking at stocks.
In minor assignment 4 I was able to learn new terminology from Bazerman like social facts. I learned that social facts is presenting facts to a person about something you have more knowledge about then the other person. For example, maybe the person has invested in to many risky investments for their age. You could provide them with numbers that suggest investing in other stocks is a safer bet. They would then trust you and believe it to me true. You are using social facts to demonstrate your skills in your finance discourse community.
In minor assignment 5 I was able to learn the term speech act theory through Bazerman talking about the creation of a patent. A speech act theory in summary is the performance of a language that communicates to people in many different ways. When given a situation with a person on making a certain decision on something you realize there are many ways to look at that decision. You can have many different interpretations of why that person made that decision. Also, the person next to you can have a different opinion then you do on that same person.
Next, I was able to determine the genre I wanted to discuss for my major assignment preliminary analysis, which was business letters Michael Burry and Warren Buffett send to their investors/shareholders. I wrote a reflective introduction discussing how I learned Burry and Buffet letters used the appeals of ethos, pathos, and logos in their letters. Also, how they used many different analytical tools such as delivery and style in their letters.
In minor assignment 6 I was able to start reading Caesar's Last Breath chapters 1-3.
In these chapters I was able to learn the term arrangement, and how Kean the author of used arrangement in his writing. Kean effectively tells his story by introducing the element in the beginning of the chapter that he is going to talk about. He then furthers his story by taking you step by step in chronological order of the events that have occurred. This was a great us of arrangement I picked up on that helped Kean's writing be more structure and persuasive.
In minor assignment 7 I read an article called “The Last Male Northern White Rhino Is Dead” and I was able to learn how to determine what stylistic tools were used from Montgomery. For example, the first sentence of the article “The Last Male Northern White Rhino Is Dead” shows a very effective way of introducing the article with a little humor by saying “With wide three-toed hooves and no thumbs, Sudan could neither swipe right nor swipe left.”
In minor assignment 8 I read an article called “Cancer Doctors Cite Risks of Drinking Alcohol". I choose this article as it relates to my final project being Gloria Gemma project because it related to chapter 19 and what Montgomery had discussed. I learned how this article displayed persuasiveness by clearly stating their message to their audience by saying “The message is not, ‘Don’t drink.’ It’s, ‘If you want to reduce your cancer risk, drink less”. Montgomery used words in this sentence that make your reader want to continue to read more.
In minor assignment 9 I was able to learn the three different theories Smart studied about global climate change. Through looking at the Advocates and Skeptics I learned the different sides of the debate of global climate change. I then learned the Smart used genre sets and genre system in his study. Smart was able to find a good amount of research by looking at blogs and seeing how people communicate to their audience based on what they post. Also, how people set up their website in order to attract new people to look at it.
In minor assignment 10 I look at the article “The March for Science Can’t Figure Out How to Handle Diversity” and the article "How the March for Science splits researchers” in order to learn how to help the Gloria Gemma organization through our writing by focusing on the audience and using speech act theory's to draw their attention.
What I learned through the Major Assignments
Preliminary Analysis
The first major assignment I did was a preliminary analysis where are targeted audience was our own classmates and professor. We had to write a paper about a scientific discourse that demonstrate our skills/ knowledge about the discourse community we choose. Me and my partner Stan decided to focus on business writing in the Finance field. I was able to find letters on Michael Burry a hedge fund manger of Scion Capital, while Stan choose letters from Warren Buffet the well-know investor and CEO of Berkshire Hathaway. We started off by writing a rough draft of the preliminary analysis. We used terms such as the appeals ethos, pathos, and logos throughout our paper. Also, we used social facts, styles, deliveries, and genre terms as well. We compared Burry's 2001 and 2002 letter with Buffet's 1977, 1979, 2008, and 2016 letter. We had not included an interview from our business writing professor in this draft yet. After submitting our rough draft we received feedback from our classmates who peer review our preliminary analysis. We learned through our feedback that while we included important facts about Burry and Buffet writing style we were dragging on way to much. We needed to have our paragraphs be more concise because our sentences were often long and repetitive. We needed to eliminate sentences that were essentially saying the same thing. Also, by adding the information from our professor Dr. Forsa it will provide the essay with more insight. In addition, professor Dr. Forsa would add the element of real world situations she has seen by looking at business writing and how certain business writing can be more effect then others. We then started to use the feedback we received when we started writing on the second draft.
In the second draft we included a paragraph dedicated to professor Dr. Forsa who we interview on the genre of business writing. This paragraph definitely added some more content to how business writing can be effective by the terminology we able to discover through interviewing our professor. We felt this interview helped with tying back to how effective Michael Burry and Warren Buffet were when writing their letters to their investors and shareholders. We also tried to cut down our paragraphs in order for them to be more concise and clear. We included a conclusion wrapping up our preliminary analysis that we did not include in our rough draft. We had then received feedback from professor Hendrickson on what he thought about our paper and what he would like us to do to the paper in order for improvement for our final draft. Professor Hendrickson thought our paper was very fascinating idea, but he felt that we did not compare Burry and Buffet's letters in the paper. Also, he said we did not included enough about why our interview with our business writing teacher was connected to our comparison between Burry and Buffett's letters. He told us to focus on only a few terms within our preliminary analysis so it would easier to compare and contrast Burry and Buffet's letters more smoothly. He finished off his feedback by saying how we still needed to condense down our paragraphs as they were very long.
As we started working on our final draft me and Stan realize all the problems we had within our past drafts and decided to start from scratch our final draft. We first wanted to each have 2 letters from Burry and Buffett that were directly related with one another. We also wanted to use similar terms when analyzing the letters, so it was easier to compare and contrast them. We first had 2 letters form Burry and Buffet on how they performed throughout the year compare to the S&P 500. We provided a quick summary paragraph of Burry and Buffett's letters of our first paragraphs. We then analyzed our letters using the appeals of logos, pathos, and ethos in the second paragraph. We the included a compare and contrast section dedicated to comparing Burry and Buffet similarities and differences. Also, we included terminology we used from professor Dr. Forsa in this section as well to relate back to how Burry and Buffet were effective in their writing. We then repeated the same format as before for the next two letters of Burry and Buffet's. Only this time their letters were focus upon the 2008 financial crisis. We were able to see what the 2 different investors were telling their investors/shareholders during this rough time, and how effective they were in their writing to their audience. We used similar appeals within these letters as we found appeals to be appropriate for these letters as well. Through the format we layout for our final draft we made sure our paper was clear and concise to our audience. We then concluded our paper by giving a conclusion that type the main purpose of paper back together. We both personally thought we did a much better job with this final version of our preliminary analysis, and found it to be a great paper to read.
Gloria Gemma Final Project
The second major assignment I work within a group on 6 people where we first compose a 1 page proposal to the Gloria Gemma Foundation. This 1 page proposal we created was to convince the Gloria Gemma Foundation we could help their social media campaign and their website "Knowledge is Campaign" target more millennials. We made this document in memo format and made sure our writing was reader-centered in order for it to be an effective proposal. Our professor emailed our proposal to the Gloria Gemma foundation and then we just waited to see if they liked our ideas. We then received an email back saying they were impressing with what we had to offer and wanted us to create a mock up of instagram posts along with a website including the information on the 6 topics they gave us.
We started to then work on the final project by creating ideas for how they could improve their instagram account and website through research. Each member was assigned to research a different subject. I received Alcohol and how it causes an increase risk to cancer. I was able to learn a lot more about Alcohol through researching different sites, while making sure they were credible sites as well. We then as a group shared a google doc and started putting down the information we had on our different subjects in how they related to cancer. As soon as we were down researching we then used that information we gathered and started to put them in an instagram post format along with pictures to go with them. This process took awhile as we wanted to make sure we creating appeal instagram posts that would attract millennials. We wanted our captions to be concise and clear because when looking at Gloria Gemma instagram account we saw there captions of their posts were very long and ineffective. While putting the posts together we also had a format for what time and day Gloria Gemma should post them. We included this as this was huge in creating traffic for their instagram account. As we finished all of our instagram posts we wanted to do something that would attract users to go to their website. Thats when we came up with the idea of putting a link in their bio of their website. Then when they post something at the end of every caption they would say to learn more go to the link in our bio to see the "Knowledge is Power" website. This would be a great way of connecting the two.
We then started to work on the website as one of group members suggested we use google sites to develop a website for Gloria Gemma. We created an appealing cover page to our website and included a purpose statement based the background knowledge of what Gloria Gemma stood for. We then decided it would be best to create separate pages within the website for each of us while including the references of our research at the end of each page. We wanted the website to be informative and pleasing to look at. I broke down my section based on the sequences I did my instagram posts in to keep it organized. I wanted my page to include more information in it then my instagram posts had, so when my instagram posts grab the attention of millennials they would be able to learn more about how alcohol increase the risks of getting cancer. I had question for each section of my page followed by the answered formatted into bullets. I thought the questions would make the reader more interested to read more. I included with the questions eye catching pictures in each question to want the reader what you learned more about what I am informing them. After the information about alcohol causing cancer I then included brief paragraphs about each source I used explaining how they were a credible sources that were safe to use to gather information from. I included pictures with each source to encourage people to use these sources as they were beneficial for me. As concluded the website and had our instagram posts done are next job was writing the paper and presenting it.
We followed the format our professor gave us when writing our reflective introduction. We included a brief overview of what we did for Gloria Gemma's social media campaign along with their website. We then talked about the important of instagram and why Gloria Gemma should continue to use it in a productive way. We gave an outline to what we did for their Instagram account and how it will improve the amount of users that attracted to their account. We then went over our whole website plan and how we connect that with their instagram account with a link in their bio. After that we decided to introduce each topic we discussed by giving brief paragraphs about the research we found in our topics, and also another paragraph about how that topic relates to social media. We felt this was would be good for Gloria Gemma to know what we researched and how it can be used through social media. We then concluded the paper with a conclusion tying back to our strategy to improve Gloria Gemma's social media campaign and website.
The final thing we had to do was create a powerpoint presentation for Gloria Gemma. We went about creating the presentation by giving them a general overview with our goals, an introduction, our website ideas, our social media campaign strategy. We pulled this information from our paper we had written for them. We just wanted to highlight the most important aspects of our document in the most Before presenting in front of the Gloria Gemma people we gave them our written document that included our instagram posts, so they could follow the ideas we came up with. As we concluded our presentation we asked for feedback and questions from the people from Gloria Gemma. We then answered all the questions we had along with answering our professor questions as well. We wanted to inform Gloria Gemma we did our research and have great ideas for them to have great success in the future. We thank them after the presentation for letting us work with them, and hope all the best for the future of their foundation.
What I learned through the Minor Assignments
In minor assignment 1 I was able to apply what I learned from Montgomery how the term rhetoric apply to science writing in the form of storytelling. Also, I was able to learned how rhetoric in science helps with your writing language and how it organizes your writing in order to communicate to your discourse community effectively.
In minor assignment 2 I was able to learn how my Finance teacher syllabus used certain language and tone within it. I then learned how the way my Finance teacher wrote his syllabus was a direct effect of his discourse community being in business. People within business tend to write in a very straightforward way that is concise and clear.
In minor assignment 3 I was able to learn to apply what I learned about Finance by looking at a Finance article. I was able to apply appeals within looking at this Finance article. One appeal I looked at was pathos because when I learned when looking at investments in Finance a person's emotion has a big impact on the strategy they use when looking at stocks.
In minor assignment 4 I was able to learn new terminology from Bazerman like social facts. I learned that social facts is presenting facts to a person about something you have more knowledge about then the other person. For example, maybe the person has invested in to many risky investments for their age. You could provide them with numbers that suggest investing in other stocks is a safer bet. They would then trust you and believe it to me true. You are using social facts to demonstrate your skills in your finance discourse community.
In minor assignment 5 I was able to learn the term speech act theory through Bazerman talking about the creation of a patent. A speech act theory in summary is the performance of a language that communicates to people in many different ways. When given a situation with a person on making a certain decision on something you realize there are many ways to look at that decision. You can have many different interpretations of why that person made that decision. Also, the person next to you can have a different opinion then you do on that same person.
Next, I was able to determine the genre I wanted to discuss for my major assignment preliminary analysis, which was business letters Michael Burry and Warren Buffett send to their investors/shareholders. I wrote a reflective introduction discussing how I learned Burry and Buffet letters used the appeals of ethos, pathos, and logos in their letters. Also, how they used many different analytical tools such as delivery and style in their letters.
In minor assignment 6 I was able to start reading Caesar's Last Breath chapters 1-3.
In these chapters I was able to learn the term arrangement, and how Kean the author of used arrangement in his writing. Kean effectively tells his story by introducing the element in the beginning of the chapter that he is going to talk about. He then furthers his story by taking you step by step in chronological order of the events that have occurred. This was a great us of arrangement I picked up on that helped Kean's writing be more structure and persuasive.
In minor assignment 7 I read an article called “The Last Male Northern White Rhino Is Dead” and I was able to learn how to determine what stylistic tools were used from Montgomery. For example, the first sentence of the article “The Last Male Northern White Rhino Is Dead” shows a very effective way of introducing the article with a little humor by saying “With wide three-toed hooves and no thumbs, Sudan could neither swipe right nor swipe left.”
In minor assignment 8 I read an article called “Cancer Doctors Cite Risks of Drinking Alcohol". I choose this article as it relates to my final project being Gloria Gemma project because it related to chapter 19 and what Montgomery had discussed. I learned how this article displayed persuasiveness by clearly stating their message to their audience by saying “The message is not, ‘Don’t drink.’ It’s, ‘If you want to reduce your cancer risk, drink less”. Montgomery used words in this sentence that make your reader want to continue to read more.
In minor assignment 9 I was able to learn the three different theories Smart studied about global climate change. Through looking at the Advocates and Skeptics I learned the different sides of the debate of global climate change. I then learned the Smart used genre sets and genre system in his study. Smart was able to find a good amount of research by looking at blogs and seeing how people communicate to their audience based on what they post. Also, how people set up their website in order to attract new people to look at it.
In minor assignment 10 I look at the article “The March for Science Can’t Figure Out How to Handle Diversity” and the article "How the March for Science splits researchers” in order to learn how to help the Gloria Gemma organization through our writing by focusing on the audience and using speech act theory's to draw their attention.
What I learned through the Major Assignments
Preliminary Analysis
The first major assignment I did was a preliminary analysis where are targeted audience was our own classmates and professor. We had to write a paper about a scientific discourse that demonstrate our skills/ knowledge about the discourse community we choose. Me and my partner Stan decided to focus on business writing in the Finance field. I was able to find letters on Michael Burry a hedge fund manger of Scion Capital, while Stan choose letters from Warren Buffet the well-know investor and CEO of Berkshire Hathaway. We started off by writing a rough draft of the preliminary analysis. We used terms such as the appeals ethos, pathos, and logos throughout our paper. Also, we used social facts, styles, deliveries, and genre terms as well. We compared Burry's 2001 and 2002 letter with Buffet's 1977, 1979, 2008, and 2016 letter. We had not included an interview from our business writing professor in this draft yet. After submitting our rough draft we received feedback from our classmates who peer review our preliminary analysis. We learned through our feedback that while we included important facts about Burry and Buffet writing style we were dragging on way to much. We needed to have our paragraphs be more concise because our sentences were often long and repetitive. We needed to eliminate sentences that were essentially saying the same thing. Also, by adding the information from our professor Dr. Forsa it will provide the essay with more insight. In addition, professor Dr. Forsa would add the element of real world situations she has seen by looking at business writing and how certain business writing can be more effect then others. We then started to use the feedback we received when we started writing on the second draft.
In the second draft we included a paragraph dedicated to professor Dr. Forsa who we interview on the genre of business writing. This paragraph definitely added some more content to how business writing can be effective by the terminology we able to discover through interviewing our professor. We felt this interview helped with tying back to how effective Michael Burry and Warren Buffet were when writing their letters to their investors and shareholders. We also tried to cut down our paragraphs in order for them to be more concise and clear. We included a conclusion wrapping up our preliminary analysis that we did not include in our rough draft. We had then received feedback from professor Hendrickson on what he thought about our paper and what he would like us to do to the paper in order for improvement for our final draft. Professor Hendrickson thought our paper was very fascinating idea, but he felt that we did not compare Burry and Buffet's letters in the paper. Also, he said we did not included enough about why our interview with our business writing teacher was connected to our comparison between Burry and Buffett's letters. He told us to focus on only a few terms within our preliminary analysis so it would easier to compare and contrast Burry and Buffet's letters more smoothly. He finished off his feedback by saying how we still needed to condense down our paragraphs as they were very long.
As we started working on our final draft me and Stan realize all the problems we had within our past drafts and decided to start from scratch our final draft. We first wanted to each have 2 letters from Burry and Buffett that were directly related with one another. We also wanted to use similar terms when analyzing the letters, so it was easier to compare and contrast them. We first had 2 letters form Burry and Buffet on how they performed throughout the year compare to the S&P 500. We provided a quick summary paragraph of Burry and Buffett's letters of our first paragraphs. We then analyzed our letters using the appeals of logos, pathos, and ethos in the second paragraph. We the included a compare and contrast section dedicated to comparing Burry and Buffet similarities and differences. Also, we included terminology we used from professor Dr. Forsa in this section as well to relate back to how Burry and Buffet were effective in their writing. We then repeated the same format as before for the next two letters of Burry and Buffet's. Only this time their letters were focus upon the 2008 financial crisis. We were able to see what the 2 different investors were telling their investors/shareholders during this rough time, and how effective they were in their writing to their audience. We used similar appeals within these letters as we found appeals to be appropriate for these letters as well. Through the format we layout for our final draft we made sure our paper was clear and concise to our audience. We then concluded our paper by giving a conclusion that type the main purpose of paper back together. We both personally thought we did a much better job with this final version of our preliminary analysis, and found it to be a great paper to read.
Gloria Gemma Final Project
The second major assignment I work within a group on 6 people where we first compose a 1 page proposal to the Gloria Gemma Foundation. This 1 page proposal we created was to convince the Gloria Gemma Foundation we could help their social media campaign and their website "Knowledge is Campaign" target more millennials. We made this document in memo format and made sure our writing was reader-centered in order for it to be an effective proposal. Our professor emailed our proposal to the Gloria Gemma foundation and then we just waited to see if they liked our ideas. We then received an email back saying they were impressing with what we had to offer and wanted us to create a mock up of instagram posts along with a website including the information on the 6 topics they gave us.
We started to then work on the final project by creating ideas for how they could improve their instagram account and website through research. Each member was assigned to research a different subject. I received Alcohol and how it causes an increase risk to cancer. I was able to learn a lot more about Alcohol through researching different sites, while making sure they were credible sites as well. We then as a group shared a google doc and started putting down the information we had on our different subjects in how they related to cancer. As soon as we were down researching we then used that information we gathered and started to put them in an instagram post format along with pictures to go with them. This process took awhile as we wanted to make sure we creating appeal instagram posts that would attract millennials. We wanted our captions to be concise and clear because when looking at Gloria Gemma instagram account we saw there captions of their posts were very long and ineffective. While putting the posts together we also had a format for what time and day Gloria Gemma should post them. We included this as this was huge in creating traffic for their instagram account. As we finished all of our instagram posts we wanted to do something that would attract users to go to their website. Thats when we came up with the idea of putting a link in their bio of their website. Then when they post something at the end of every caption they would say to learn more go to the link in our bio to see the "Knowledge is Power" website. This would be a great way of connecting the two.
We then started to work on the website as one of group members suggested we use google sites to develop a website for Gloria Gemma. We created an appealing cover page to our website and included a purpose statement based the background knowledge of what Gloria Gemma stood for. We then decided it would be best to create separate pages within the website for each of us while including the references of our research at the end of each page. We wanted the website to be informative and pleasing to look at. I broke down my section based on the sequences I did my instagram posts in to keep it organized. I wanted my page to include more information in it then my instagram posts had, so when my instagram posts grab the attention of millennials they would be able to learn more about how alcohol increase the risks of getting cancer. I had question for each section of my page followed by the answered formatted into bullets. I thought the questions would make the reader more interested to read more. I included with the questions eye catching pictures in each question to want the reader what you learned more about what I am informing them. After the information about alcohol causing cancer I then included brief paragraphs about each source I used explaining how they were a credible sources that were safe to use to gather information from. I included pictures with each source to encourage people to use these sources as they were beneficial for me. As concluded the website and had our instagram posts done are next job was writing the paper and presenting it.
We followed the format our professor gave us when writing our reflective introduction. We included a brief overview of what we did for Gloria Gemma's social media campaign along with their website. We then talked about the important of instagram and why Gloria Gemma should continue to use it in a productive way. We gave an outline to what we did for their Instagram account and how it will improve the amount of users that attracted to their account. We then went over our whole website plan and how we connect that with their instagram account with a link in their bio. After that we decided to introduce each topic we discussed by giving brief paragraphs about the research we found in our topics, and also another paragraph about how that topic relates to social media. We felt this was would be good for Gloria Gemma to know what we researched and how it can be used through social media. We then concluded the paper with a conclusion tying back to our strategy to improve Gloria Gemma's social media campaign and website.
The final thing we had to do was create a powerpoint presentation for Gloria Gemma. We went about creating the presentation by giving them a general overview with our goals, an introduction, our website ideas, our social media campaign strategy. We pulled this information from our paper we had written for them. We just wanted to highlight the most important aspects of our document in the most Before presenting in front of the Gloria Gemma people we gave them our written document that included our instagram posts, so they could follow the ideas we came up with. As we concluded our presentation we asked for feedback and questions from the people from Gloria Gemma. We then answered all the questions we had along with answering our professor questions as well. We wanted to inform Gloria Gemma we did our research and have great ideas for them to have great success in the future. We thank them after the presentation for letting us work with them, and hope all the best for the future of their foundation.